“Presidential Elections really make you think about what is best for this Country, and this year is no different. The two candidates both present valid points on an array of issues. McCain’s plans appeal to my morals and concerns about the future, but it is Obama that will win the election. He came into the election with a very compelling speech, and is more appealing to young voters.”- Grant McCloskey
First off, I felt that I had speech that was blunt and to the point. I did not try to use wordy sentences to get my ideas across. I took the route with the least amount of resistance. This factor alone added to the clarity and grace of my paper.
Another idea I tried to focus on was not being so repetitive and the flow of the paragraph. The paragraph flows into each next idea; I don’t present something at the beginning and not explain it until the end, it flows into each additional point.
It was very difficult to achieve this. It makes you second-guess everything that you write to make sure it goes together with everything else. This issue is something I need to become more aware of in my writing. In almost every paper I have encountered this problem.
This is something that I need to continue to work on to improve my writing. To accomplish this I need to have times were I just go through and cut out unnecessary words or phrases. I just need to take the time and not rush through it.
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