Weekly Blog_7_Lunkun Deng

The presidential election is fast approaching. So the hottest topic now is who will be the new president. I, a foreigner, do not know or care much about the election. However, I think whoever will win the election must have two main qualities. A qualified president must be responsible for his citizens. Furthermore, a president must own strong abilities to build up a harmonious society, with both high economic performance and democratic political environment.


In my writing, I have followed the rules in Style in these ways:

First, the starting sentence of the article points out the topic of the paper, Presidential election. Likewise, the first several words of each sentence include a clear subject and a strong verb. For example, the verb “approach” in the first sentence powerful state what is going on and “the hottest topic” put forward the subject of the second sentence. In addition, the whole paragraph has the common topic of “presidential election.”

Second, this paragraph flows smoothly by following rules such as “Know-New principle” and “Putting complex or new information towards the end of sentences.” For instance, the fourth sentence ends with “new information” of “main qualities”. It suggests what I will pick up in the next sentence. Then my fifth sentence starts with “old information” of “A qualified president”, carrying out what the “qualities” are.

Last, the paragraph follows the rules of “style” in details. I have tried to avoid nominalization and passive voice. Taking the first sentence as an example, I use an active verb “approach”, instead of saying “be held.” Besides, I have deleted some senseless words in the paragraph as well as in the whole article.

To put all in a nutshell, although in my article I still use some nominalization such as “election”, I think I have followed William and made a good work.